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'All eyes on me, I pale with fright a hawk screeching, in blackest night, It beats its wings, It looks my way, Gold eyes are fixed upon its prey, The spirit's come, it's come for me, piercing echo of my screams, Dragged away, the searing pain! Whirlwind opened, whips my brain. The red abyss of smoke and flame the evil demon knows my name 'You can't have me! He paid the price, leave me alone.. I live in Christ!' Blinking slowly day has come It was a dream.. but real for some'

This desc was created recently on my mud, and I want some opinions on it. It's rather a joke on my mud. I'd like it if you posted, thanks. :)

It reads like someone has been stealing Christian rock band lyrics for room descriptions.

Is that the description for a room in your MUD? How does it fit with the area? I assume you aren't a Christian themed MUD by your comment about it being a joke, so what is your MUD's theme or whatever?

Well, I'd hate to criticize it severely, and then find that it was plagiarized from one of Gerard Manley Hopkins's lesser-known poems.

But...I can't see how it COULD be a room description. You wouldn't mind giving us the descriptions of the adjoining rooms, would you, just to give a little context?

Looks more like a mob or player description to me. The way you posted it here it has some punctuation issues, and I agree that unless you have christian religion on your mud, the Christ part sticks out like a sore thumb.

But other than that, why not.

Do you mean the painful grammar or the creepy undertone that seems out of place in a game? :-)

Seen better, what's the fuzz about?

Truthfully, I think it's terrible.

-G

Well it would be odd.. absent any context. It's a description of what exactly? A book? a log entry? note? scroll? riddle? what? Your game is a medieval one? modern? world of darkness?

This is more like the rumblings of a crazy deluded man rather than a description of anything meaningful.
It is like trying to describe Kurtz from 'Heart of Darkness' by having as his description 'The horror! The horror!'.

I like the dark feeling it conveys but it is not really a good description ;)

Well, the desc space is used up for that (or so says the person who created it)... My mud is medieval fantasy, yes, darkness related... The person who created it didn't exactly specify what it was, so everyone else assumed it was the desc (please note that I got rid of the 'enter' keys - the new lines... hence the capitals and bad punctuation.)

It reminds me of the Left Behind series by Tim LaHaye and Jerry B. Jenkins (currently reading). Good stuff.

It looks more like an extra description than a room; something you would see on a sign or tapestry. There's no indication of what the room looks like. Perhaps someone ripped out a page of their diary and posted it on the mud.

I found this quote on this site here:

http://adepunyablog.blogspot.com/